The Beach
Once upon a time there were three boys called Falakiko, Siosifa and Demetrius. They asked their mum if they could go the beach. Their mum said "Yes".
All the three boys swam in the beach. Suddenly, Falakiko saw Demetrius drowning. Demetrius was shouting out for help. Demetrius's Dad heard him. He ran to the Life Savers. Falakiko and Siosifa ran with the life savers where Demetrius was sinking down in the water. They quickly got Demetrius out and called 111. The ambulance people said that Demetrius was O.K. and did not need to go to the hospital. Demetrius said " Thank you Falakiko and Siosifa, You are heroes". Demetrius was very proud of his friends.
By Toma
13 comments:
Hey Toma, this is a really good story I really loved the way that you used powerful words so your story can be better.
Hello Toma this is a realy cool story I liked that you tried your best.
GOOD WORK!!
Wow!. What a cool story. You have some really tense sentences.
Awesome1
Wow!. What a cool story. You have some really tense sentences.
Awesome!
Wow! what a cool story
I love how you used perfect punctuation
Awesome! :o
keep it up toma.good job
keep it up toma.
Hi room 2
i like your story this is aumau from room 2 as well.
To Toma
I liked you'r store because it was cool.
From Esther
Hello Toma, Your story was very funny. I liked when Demetrius drowned.
From Demetrius.
Hi Toma
I liked your store because it was cool.
Hello Toma, Your story was very funny. I liked when Demetrius drowned.
From Demetrius.
Hello Toma, Your story was very funny. I liked when Demetrius drowned.
From Demetrius.
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